And I'm still deciding if I liked it or not... Telling a story using pictures always seemed like a miracle to me. I envy artists who can DRAW a story, frame by frame.

On the other hand, artistic side is not very impressive or expressive. Perhaps you intentionally want to get away from the standard comicbook inking, but your "messy" style isn't working well, imo. The eye of the veiwer must immidiatly catch key characters and objects that are espesially bright and detailed, while here almost everything is blended together.
Another expressive tool is angles. I don't know why, but they don't catch my eye either. Angles are always hard to draw, but here they're just... not very interesting.
And finally, poses and face expressions. You've intentionally limited yourself to characters who have no "faces" and therefore can't express emotions. That's okay. Anatomy and poses are not the best I've seen, but also alright. oBe-ish anatomy...
All in all, that's not that bad for the first attempt, but you still have lots of stuff to work on. Come on, you're a pro artist!

Oh, and no hard feelings! Honestly, you've been always inspiring me with your art. Therefore mMore oBe art is requiered!