Well, here is my review:
At first I have to say this is a better-than-average beginner map. The intro is nice although the whole story could be more comprehend

. I was quite suprised at the realistic looking of buildings, especially the final temple was done very well. The amount of sprites is suitable, many gib objects...I like it. But I was disapointed when I was looking for some shading. Yes, there are some areas with shadows but I hoped for more detailed environment. This lack of shadow is usual in beginners' maps so you don't have to worry about it. I am fond of your work with textures and different areas, I was able to travel through many of them. The game was longer than I expected but I wasn't bored. The design of this map has no bigger problems, well done!
There was only one thing that annoyed me a bit. Your map isn't linear at all. Each map should have a theme - a factory, a city, a cemetery, etc... This map has none and therefore I wasn't able to expect what will come next and the constant changing of environments made me somewhat frustrated. My advice is to think about the theme at first and then to start mapping.
Overall I enjoyed this map and I am looking forward to your next one.
Btw, which program have you done the cutscene with?